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In my opinion,everyone who want to live in the countryside all love the fresh air and the beat-iful scenery,like the beatiful Sunside and the Sunset,thegreen fields and so on.And then ther-e will be much soil let us plant vegetable or paddy that we can have more green food.

However there is some inconvenient in the countryside.Firt of all,the traffic is bad notbecause crowded but usually muddy,espectually it's raining.Second,the pubic accommodation isn't perfect so that the peasants have a bit place for entertainment and relax themslves and have difficulty to seeing the doctor .

Anyway the countryside is a good place for holiday and let your hair down!

 

Please help me correct the essay ,thank you!

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  Maybe you can write  it  like the  following: 
   In  my opinion ,everyone who wants to live in the countryside loves  the fresh air and the beautiful  sceneries,likes  the beautiful Sunside and the Sunset ,the green fields and so on.  In the countryside there is much soil  where we  can plant vegetables. Also,we can eat  lots of green food. 

     However ,there is  a lot of inconvenience in the countryside.  First of all,the traffic is bad not because crowd_ed but usually muddy, especially when it's raining.Secondly,the public  accommodations aren't perfect so that the peasants have no place for them to enterain ,relax themselves, and have difficulty to see the doctor.
    In a word the countryside is a good place for you to have a holidy and let yourself  relaxing.


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